英语翻译吉姆是一个十岁大的小男孩,他父母在黑山海湾旁经营一家旅馆.有一天,旅馆来了一位脸上带着刀疤、高大结实的客人,他就

his parents ran a hotel near the Gulf of Montenegro、
这里不能用ran ,要用run,这里不存在过去时态
the hotel came with a scar on his face,the tall and strong guests,he is captain Bill
这一句,你不能只按照中文的格式翻译啊,而且语序还是要调整一下.要变成there was a the tall and strong man came into the hotel with a scar on his face,he is captain Bill.
Jim very much like to listen to Bill tell stories,that sounds very scary experience for Jim Scared
从这里一看就知道你是机译的.这一句根本不是这样的,应该是
Jim liked to listen to Bill's stories very much.the stories which were sounded very scary made Jim was very interested in it.
Bill captain died in a hostel改成in the hostel
Jim Bill inadvertently found the body of a treasure map with.
改成Jim Bill inadvertently found a treasure map in the body.
So Jim and his partners in the story of Treasure Island treasure hunt begins.
改成So the story of Jim and his partners in Treasure Island begins from here.
改好了,希望对你有所帮助